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    dots Submission Name: Inspireddots

    Author: luvy
    ASL Info:    19/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 270/168/35
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    To long have i kept my ink in check

    An kept the talents of my pen hidden from the world

    But tonight i let my ink flow like the oil of OPEC

    Words once restricted now unfurled

    Are you the reason why

    Can i credit you for my sudden insperation

    Has you interest allowed me to grab these words an not let them fly by

    Is your charisma the cause of my narration

    You know there was another who took residence in my heart

    He once made me glow like a candle in the dark

    But my love faded and what we had fell apart

    Creatively i died before you became my spark

    Now when i think of you all i can do is smile

    When i look ahead i see great potential for us

    I don't know the future but i do know this

    A relationship with you would be more than worthwhile

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      this is beautiful and rational i admire your courage to face the unknown and the truth, -i myself am walking through it expecting struggle and am struggling with the lack of it. you express the caution, the curiosity, the passion and the meaning so vividly. i wish the theme in the begining went further through the poem. but i cant say that that would do any justice lol thanks for writting this.
    | Posted on 2009-12-27 00:00:00 | by Cure | [ Reply to This ]

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