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    dots Submission Name: Paindots
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    Author: ModestyB
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 64/38/31
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsPaindots
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    The pain in my head is never-ending
    Only matched by the pain in my teeth
    My body aches from all the bruises
    Broken bones add their quota too
    Cuts and gashes weep my blood
    Ruptured spleen is not so good
    I tell you I donít feel too well
    In fact I feel like bloody hell.
    Agonising only increases the pain
    Talking about it makes it worse
    If only I had a magic wand
    To make someone lift this curse
    I tell you it wasnít my doing
    Itís all dreadful mistake
    A case of mistaken identity
    I kept on saying it was not me.





    Submitted on 2009-12-27 08:31:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2010-01-10 00:00:00 | by guruleocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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