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    dots Submission Name: Perfect Lovedots
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    Author: PhantomRose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43/58/35
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 564
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1307



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       I wrote this back when I was still mith my ex...


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    dotsPerfect Lovedots
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    As I lay there crying
    while we're on the phone at night
    You talk to me all sweet-like
    and make me feel alright
    You tell me that you love me
    and express how much you care
    You say how much you miss me
    and wish that I was there
    I hug my pillow tightly
    and wish that it was you
    Knowing there is nothing...
    nothing I can do...
    I take a deep, shuddery breath
    and whipe my mattery eyes
    Then I lift my middle finger
    and curse the man I despise
    You bellow out a hearty laugh
    and tell me I'm a dork
    Then I tell you to shut up
    and I threaten you with a fork
    Finally I feel better
    and I tell you I'm alright
    It cheers me up so much
    just talking to you at night
    Eventually we're too tired
    and we know that we must sleep
    So I tell you that I love you
    and I'm glad you're mine to keep
    We manage to hang the phone up
    and I lay down my tired head
    I close my eyes and think
    of all the sweet things that you said
    Before I know it I'm asleep
    and I dream that I'm with you
    I smile at you and impersonate Yoda
    "Love you babe, I do"...




    Submitted on 2009-12-27 23:11:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A heart filled expression of your love.
    Umm... as I read this about an ex. I have no love advice I just like to see the happening of peace and compassion... I think that's what we all need.
    Still it is a heart warming tale that could fill the breath of all that see this sight!
    | Posted on 2009-12-29 00:00:00 | by 13thprotector | [ Reply to This ]


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