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Perfect Love

Author: PhantomRose
ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43 /58 /35
Words: 218
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I wrote this back when I was still mith my ex...

Perfect Love

As I lay there crying
while we're on the phone at night
You talk to me all sweet-like
and make me feel alright
You tell me that you love me
and express how much you care
You say how much you miss me
and wish that I was there
I hug my pillow tightly
and wish that it was you
Knowing there is nothing...
nothing I can do...
I take a deep, shuddery breath
and whipe my mattery eyes
Then I lift my middle finger
and curse the man I despise
You bellow out a hearty laugh
and tell me I'm a dork
Then I tell you to shut up
and I threaten you with a fork
Finally I feel better
and I tell you I'm alright
It cheers me up so much
just talking to you at night
Eventually we're too tired
and we know that we must sleep
So I tell you that I love you
and I'm glad you're mine to keep
We manage to hang the phone up
and I lay down my tired head
I close my eyes and think
of all the sweet things that you said
Before I know it I'm asleep
and I dream that I'm with you
I smile at you and impersonate Yoda
"Love you babe, I do"...

Submitted on 2009-12-27 23:11:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A heart filled expression of your love.
Umm... as I read this about an ex. I have no love advice I just like to see the happening of peace and compassion... I think that's what we all need.
Still it is a heart warming tale that could fill the breath of all that see this sight!
| Posted on 2009-12-29 00:00:00 | by 13thprotector | [ Reply to This ]

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