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    dots Submission Name: Troubled Romancedots
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    Author: PhantomRose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43/58/35
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 490
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       Yeah... the one more chance thing didn't work out and we are no longer together.... I was writing chunks of this as we went through each stage, and you can see the little transitions in it


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    dotsTroubled Romancedots
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    You're my first thought in the morning
    and my last thought at night
    You're my midnight darkness
    and my morning light
    You're the reason for the flutter in my heart
    and the shaking in my hands
    The reason that I smile
    and the reason that I dance.....
    This is how I felt for you
    before you broke my heart
    You filled my soul with passion
    and then you ripped me appart....
    You fooled me into thinking
    that you truely loved me back
    Now the only thing I think about
    is the feeling that I lack.....
    You filled me with promises
    that never would come true
    Then broke my heart to pieces
    when you said that we were through....
    Something in me compelled me
    to give you one more chance
    And I hope to god you'll stay with me
    despite our troubled romance....
    No matter what the outcome
    of one thing I am sure
    You're the reason for the beat of my heart
    until it beats no more.....




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      This is written beautfully, Jaymee. And you say I'm the better poet? Hardly. I just write more often. As for the meaning of this poem, you know my opinion and my advice. just keep it in mind, k? LOVE YA GIRL

    Blessed Be,
    Bohne
    | Posted on 2009-12-30 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this! It is how i felt with some of my realationships in the past! You are a good writer keep it up!
    | Posted on 2009-12-28 00:00:00 | by Linz | [ Reply to This ]


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