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I'll Bet You Didn't Know


Author: PhantomRose
ASL Info:    19/F/Illinois
Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 43 /58 /35
Words: 115
Class/Type: Poetry /The pain inside
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Average Vote:    4.0000
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This isn't exactly new, actually it's pretty old, but I figured I'd put it on here anyways


I'll Bet You Didn't Know



I'll bet you didn't know I had feelings
I'll bet you didn't know it hurt whenever you hit me
I'll bet you didn't know that every harsh word you said caused a part of me to die
I'll bet you didn't know that every hug you didn't give me was a day spent wondering why you didn't want me
I'll bet you didn't know your words could penetrate my hard surface
I'll bet you didn't know that hard surface is actually soft
I'll bet you didn't know that every night you yelled at me I spent and hour sobbing into my pillow
I'll bet you didn't know that after all this, I still love you....




Submitted on 2009-12-27 23:32:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wer schlägt dich?
| Posted on 2010-01-21 00:00:00 | by frau | [ Reply to This ]
  :"( Touching, hopefully an end to a horrible beginning.
| Posted on 2009-12-30 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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