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    dots Submission Name: A confession of madnessdots
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    Author: Urisen
    ASL Info:    25/M/Netherlands
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 27/34/32
    Words: 363
    Class/Type: Poetry/Mirror or Mask
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    Description:
       In the RP section I entertain myself with what is called "the word of the day".

    ( http://www.eliteskills.com/rp/entry/115323 )

    The word of that day was 'confession'.


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    dotsA confession of madnessdots
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    __________________

    I have a confession to make,
    the truth put on display,
    for I am not exactly as I say.

    A fool, a jester,
    a parading clown
    in search of a challenge,
    a madman whos lost
    too many marbles,

    thats all me.

    But underneath it all
    there is nothing for anyone
    left to see.

    For talk I must,
    pretend to be,
    but underneath it all
    there is no me.

    The self is obsolete,
    as are my emotions,
    or so I would like you to believe,
    so careless in my notions.

    Sometimes I can be serious;
    I confess this with pride,
    for there is no switch,
    from my madness to sanity,

    which will hide inside.

    From a seeking grasp,
    clutching so tight,
    the button that need be pressed
    to make sanity
    and profanity
    collide.

    Things are a mess,
    upstairs;
    the gruff steps are worn
    by cold and rampant motions,
    fleeing up to face the stares.

    Caught with my hands,
    stuck in a cookie-jar,
    I shrug and mumble something
    not quite on par.

    Without realizing however,
    while we sit and chat,
    I take of my hat,
    and eat the cookie with glee.

    I dance; I frivol,
    care and act delightful,
    while underneath it all,
    there is only something frightful;

    A hole, a gap,
    where a heart once sat,
    perched in warm arms of a delight,
    crushed by all his might.
    Hidden, stowed away,
    deleted from the fray,
    upon a sea awash with trepidation,
    all he cared for was his elation.

    They did not match,
    the cookie and the hat,
    nor the madness and sanity,
    worry and glee,

    and for that reason,
    and that reason alone,
    he abandoned them all,
    emotions alike,
    great and tall,
    with one fell swipe.
    ______________________




    Submitted on 2009-12-28 07:46:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is absolutely magnificent! The flow, the imagery, and so many interesting lines. I tend to pick things apart, but with this I won't. For one it would take too long, and two something like this doesnt need to be torn down to be explained as greatness. Keep up the masterpieces! I look forward to reading more by you.
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    ~The Beautifully Corrupt Rough Romantic
    | Posted on 2009-12-30 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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