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    dots Submission Name: Bubble of Babylonian Bullshitdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 393
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 360
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    dotsBubble of Babylonian Bullshitdots
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    Victims of the conditioning
    The paper chase and rubber stamp
    The knots and chains
    Of addicted fear

    The sycophantic lies
    That suck upon the ego
    To bolster it sense of motivated self worth
    And it sense of sacrifice
    All in a charted landscape

    A tomfoolery
    To fool into willing slavery
    The mindless morons of the money society
    That gaseous normal life
    To which they
    So desperately cling

    Bubble of Bullshit Babylonian
    The fucked up feed line
    Of planetary abuse
    And human use
    Continues to feed the gluttony
    And that fat stinking belch of greed
    For the elite to have their savoured luxuries

    The myriad thralls on bended knee
    Buying their ideal of “happy”
    While the sick heart and cancer
    Revels in its own mockery

    Dominion handed to them
    By belief in a propaganda of television
    The masses sit back
    And chew the cud
    On the field of human sheep

    Bullshit Bubble of Babylonian
    Betrayal of the sacred spirit
    And when the Universal law will hit
    Who then will let go and “see”
    Who then among you will be free ?¿


    Victims of the conditioning
    The paper chase and rubber stamp
    The knots and chains
    Of addicted fear

    The sycophantic lies
    That suck and spew upon the ego
    To bolster it sense of motivated- self -worth
    And it sense of sacrifice
    Charted ever in a predictable landscape

    A tomfoolery
    A fool you to into a willing slavery
    The mindless morons of the money society
    That gaseous normality of life
    To which they
    So desperately cling

    Bubble of Bullshit Babylonian
    The fucked up feed line
    Of planetary abuse
    And human use
    Continues to feed the gluttony
    And that fat stinking belch of greed
    For the elite to have their savoured luxuries

    The myriad thralls on bended knee
    Buying their ideal of “happy”
    While the sick heart and cancer
    Revels in its own mockery

    Dominion handed to them
    By belief in a propaganda of television
    The masses sit back
    And chew the cud
    On the field of human sheep

    Bullshit Bubble of Babylonian
    Betrayal of the sacred spirit
    And when the Universal law will hit
    Who then will let go and “see”
    Who then among you will be free ?¿





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      i wish you could flow better. it's not bad. i like the idea behind it. its just off rhythm, no pattern. i don't really believe in structure when it comes to poetry, but if you are going to attempt structure, do it right. because i will be honest, i don't like structure because i suck at it. lol.
    | Posted on 2009-12-31 00:00:00 | by narcolepsy | [ Reply to This ]
      dam yet again you have done it! I can't express what I like so much It maybe the way you use your words how you are able to make it all flow so nicely I am jelouse this I am sure I have mentioned once or twice before. This is great although you have me wondering why its retyped..??

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2009-12-30 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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