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    dots Submission Name: Return to Avalondots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 383
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsReturn to Avalondots

    Is it so hard for you to recall
    The way it was before this tragic flaw
    Struggling against your history
    And all the things which came to be

    My love

    Can you not remember the golden temple doors
    When we walked in hallowed halls
    The inscriptions of our prayers
    Written with light upon the sacred walls

    Can you not still feel the time
    When all the world was yours and mine
    We walked upon this holy land
    Guardian and Gaia hand in hand

    My love

    So many years have past before us now
    The centuries grown in sleeping tombs
    Still we dreamed of the inseparable
    United till the very end

    We have learned to live with sorrow
    We feel the absence of the Universal
    The heart from which we both were born

    It was when I woke as if from a dream
    To see your eyes again so bright and shinning
    Egyptian Princess of the Mother Earth
    My Queen

    My love

    And upon the golden temple doors that day
    The broken seal, which had been made
    To hold the power of your love at bay
    In your curving pyramid of sleep

    Usurpers trembled in fear this day
    The lizard king’s demise is ripped
    From out the centre of his evil head
    And all the power of his minions dissolved away

    And so from the darkness into the shinning dawn
    I knelt upon these ancient steps
    Released you from your cocoon of sleep
    And placed the crown of you back into my heart

    Egyptian Goddess you were made
    Of the Mother Earth your promise laid
    And I am here
    Your servant now and guardian of my Queen

    Though the world around us has seen much change
    Still we walk out onto the shinning plains
    I lay you down upon the grass
    Make love there beneath the open stars

    My love

    Greater beauty I have never seen
    From the shinning eyes of my Queen
    I stand your warrior
    And smile into the eyes of death

    Yes I can still feel the time
    When all the world was yours and mine
    We walked upon this holy land
    Guardian and Gaia hand in hand

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