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    dots Submission Name: Too Latedots
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    Author: alyssafrench16
    ASL Info:    17/f/inherroomville
    Elite Ratio:    1.95 - 8/22/19
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 684
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 758



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       Just came to me.....


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    dotsToo Latedots
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    When you look around,
    And all you see,
    is what could've been,
    or used to be,
    Do you think of you,
    or do you think of me?


    When you hear my voice,
    or when you see my car,
    do you wish you would've gone with,
    and traveled so far,


    When you go back home,
    and lay in your bed,
    do you wish I was there,
    or do you wish I was dead?


    When you close your eyes,
    and think of the past,
    I want you to remember,
    how we had a blast.

    But now you're gone,
    You've made up your mind,
    It's a little too late,
    and it's very much over.




    Submitted on 2009-12-29 13:08:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The break up passage we all know much too well.
    The thing that can actually even break us in the end.
    reason to be called, "break" up.

    I thought this was good.
    I mean obviously its something with thought and inspiration. You know the point your trying to make with it. And perhaps letting the thoughts from your mind helped.

    Break ups suck.
    Missing someone sucks even more.
    A broken heart is dreadful.
    but its life ;]


    Hopefully, i understood this and don't seem like a blabbering idiot.
    | Posted on 2010-01-16 00:00:00 | by TasteMyRainbow | [ Reply to This ]


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