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    dots Submission Name: ...and The Wind Gave Me Youdots
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    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 75/191/246
    Words: 229
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 996
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots...and The Wind Gave Me Youdots
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    Today, a word came floating by, a feather so brilliantly white. I paused for a moment, the cold winter sky hopelessly blew even colder my way.
    Yet inside I couldn't help but feel warm as I thought of you.
    Yesterday I felt so naked inside, just wishing to be by your side. Everyday seems just today, maybe someday yesterday I can be with you.
    I will save you the fate of a single kiss, and when I say that I love you.
    I really do.

    Play for you I will, a piano, a tune made just you.
    Sing? Yes, my heartstrings carry me into a melody.

    Tomorrow, a dream still lingering on open eyes, wide awake to the excitement of life for the first time.
    I wish I could rush to you, softly embrace and cry inside. Just so happy to see your face.
    Just so happy to be alive.
    Yesterday, I said I caught a feather, haplessly floating my way.
    Fate loves to play it's games.
    Yesterday was someday tomorrow in my heart, just looking into the mirror, out the window into what I love.
    Imagining the moment our eyes could meet.

    Play for you I will, a piano, a lovely tune just for you.
    Sing? Always, my love and my heart scream through every inch of me.
    Love? Yes, I love you.




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      Structure, schmucture, rules and order -- bleh.

    Anyway...
    I found this honest. And yes, it does float, doesn't it? And play her a tune on your piano. That'll set her a-tingling, no doubt... heh.

    Well, I dunno what else to say.
    I'm not usually one for long-winded, laborious effusiveness. So, with that, adieu. And good luck (fortune favours the bold or so I've heard).
    | Posted on 2010-01-01 00:00:00 | by trinityfinger | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really well written piece you have here. It just about describes what my thoughts on true love really are. I like the way you've worded the lines here- it's very effective. I just have one correction:
    Fate loves to play it's games.
    the it's should actually be its. Also, I don't think this has quite the flow and structure for poetry - it seems more like prose. But the category doesn't really matter. Keep writing and loving!
    | Posted on 2009-12-31 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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