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    dots Submission Name: Red streamdots

    Author: cherrywillow
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 29/47/32
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsRed streamdots

    It falls along my arm
    in a staining manner.
    Haunting my every thought.
    Mocking my every dream.

    A burning memory that shall never be erased.
    continuously it calls my name to do further more. Shall it ever end or will it stain my inner soul evermore?

    A mask worn opon my face hides the unforgivable truth of what I have done.
    On-going confusion as to who I am and as to why I even belong.

    The scaring memories of the past scream the truth and I become numb from pain. I must know that I can feel. I must know that i am still living and that there is still a part of me left.

    Tears fall down my cheek as I realize that i have failed myself. That I have become my own enemy. The blade falls closer until finally a red stream of relief is released.

    Submitted on 2009-12-29 18:31:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A poem about mental illness. It makes me acutely uncomfortable because I want to cure it!
    But am only a critic not a psychiatrist.

    Often these "cutter" writings are about the writer, rather than being about some other character. If so, well please don't hurt yourself pleaqse.
    | Posted on 2010-01-03 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow that was amazing! Don't know what else to say, that was just really good. Good job :)
    | Posted on 2009-12-29 00:00:00 | by kimirin | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa. This was amazing.
    I can relate with this a lot, because of events that have happened recently.
    It made me look back on some old memories. I also feel like I receive a rather dark impression from these words.
    I can almost see the story in front of my mind's view.
    Though simply, for me, this conveyed a plethora of emotions.
    All in all, I'd say that this is a wonderful piece.

    | Posted on 2009-12-29 00:00:00 | by Kaichou | [ Reply to This ]

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