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    dots Submission Name: Treasure Chestdots
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    Author: Cayman
    ASL Info:    31
    Elite Ratio:    2.77 - 182/168/72
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsTreasure Chestdots
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    Our path has been set all this time without us knowing
    Who knew this was going to happen but God?

    Yes, we’ve both had highlights that filled our minds from time to time.
    But have we ever really felt the climax of life?

    Have we reached the full potential that God has set forth?
    Or has this been a quest, like finding the Holy Grail?

    Eager for tomorrow, hungry for next year.
    Like having a treasure chest for centuries and just finding the key beneath the sea.

    Once the treasure chest opens.
    What’s found inside will exist for eternity.




    Submitted on 2009-12-30 09:26:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Interesting thoughts but you could probably include something in the first two sets about treasure or chest- just to complete the metaphor. I don't know if I grasp what the treasure chest is suppose to symbolize though because you talk about a We and ask a lot of questions but, I'm not sure if they are answered in this by the inclusion of the promise of the chest .
    | Posted on 2010-03-05 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]


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