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    dots Submission Name: A Consequence Of Bordomdots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsA Consequence Of Bordomdots
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    You left me alone to think
    Look at the broken glass
    The blood all over the floor
    Still pouring form its starting crevace
    Grasp and grab for air
    Oh! What a beautiful sound
    Set there and watch me
    Ill try to choke them down
    There are things that people do
    Just sheerly because they are bored
    This was my addiction.
    Even in it i fail
    I was ment to fall
    Noone is ment to catch me
    Flying, Falling Dyeing im free
    You were sent to pull me through
    To make me see the light
    I pulled back and you saw my darkest fight
    What i struggle with every day
    The things ill never tell
    Boiling to the surface begging me to say
    But i choke them back and swallow them down to stay
    Ill pretend they never existed
    And forget that im addicted
    Yet the temptation screams
    Makes my ears ring
    Fall to the floor your weak
    Never open your mouth never speak.




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