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    dots Submission Name: Suddnely Silencedots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsSuddnely Silencedots
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    Suddenly Silent
    Her Body Grows Restless
    Everythings Cold
    Shes Dead Behind The Smile
    Shamelessly From Day To Day She Fakes
    All Hope Lost
    Violently Tearing To Get Out
    Evenly Tearing Apart
    Determined To Tell Someone
    Nothing Lives Anymore
    Over and over shes saved
    Tainted by thoughts of hate
    A glance at the blade
    Last chance at fate
    In love is a lie
    Very aware death is the cost
    Envy her not for grace is lost.




    Submitted on 2009-12-30 18:08:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      there is a quote that i broke up from a guy named thomas adams on grace for you, grace comes into the soul as the morning sun into the world,...
    there is more but to say that grace is lost would mean it needs to be stated that grace returns...
    what i mean is go back finish or touch up add some move stuff but don't leave the hanging of grace as some flaw in a person, grace is more dynamic....
    | Posted on 2010-01-10 00:00:00 | by guruleocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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