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    dots Submission Name: Thank Youdots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Fanfic/I hate you
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    dotsThank Youdots
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    Thank you,
    For I am this strong, viberant, independant, unquic young lady because of you!
    I learned due to you
    that this world (has normal parents like to betray) is not a little fairytail!
    I went to school even if you had been in my room that night eating me out,
    I still showed to work and busted my ass
    MORE than THAT I did it with a smile!
    You made me strong!
    Me made me tough
    Better yet I was young 12years old and I felt I knew it all!!
    I felt I had been through it all!
    So Thank you Step Father

    As far as you Mother
    You broke me down each and everytime you had the chance to do so...
    YOU RAN WITH IT
    I was simply a pawn in your game with him.
    You used me to get the things you wanted,
    you had knowledge of his capablities yet you took a chance and you lost...
    Then again you lost nothing,
    Only your 12yr old daughter did..
    HER INNOCENCE!!!!
    Therefore I despise you
    I HATE you... I wish nothing but PAIN and MISARY for the rest of your life...




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      i agree with Heather.. he doesnt even deserve a sarcastic thankyou.

    DOnt thank him for becoming the strong, viberant, independant woman you are (btw i like that line...really put well.) ... thank yourself for it. because you are the one who got up and went to school even when you had faced him in the morning or whatever. You are the one who built up who you are, no one else should be credited for it.
    | Posted on 2010-01-19 00:00:00 | by Little Gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Again well written! and I hope somewhat thereputic. However, Yes your mother is just as much to blame for the actions of your step-father because she knew and allowed it. More so I guess in a way.
    But please DO NOT LET HIM OFF WITH A THANK YOU!!! you are in a way condoning what he did to you then a child. A child that should have remained innocent,..... and had the innocence betrayed by the very people who should have given their lives to protect it. And even though he may have done his time and paid what ever a price society said,..... To thank him condones and ok's what he did.

    I hope you are well and healthy my friend and may the new year bring you the peace you still so need to find.

    Always
    Heather
    | Posted on 2010-01-01 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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