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death: chapter one

Author: KatieRox
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a horrible person named Death collects people and trains them to be like him then Ash the best of the five at his job tries to get rid of Death so he can free the souls and spirits of him and his friends plus those who were trapped in the glowy green balls they all had

death: chapter one

Ash slid his black robe on and rode down the road on his bike to the old rickety house at the end of his street. His eyes sparkled with sadness as he walked in and grabbed a dead body from the bedroom. Tears were pouring out of his eyes as he took his hand out of his pocket to reveal a small glowing ball filled with what seemed to be human souls. Ash mumbled a few words then the dead bodies soul was sucked out of its chest and dragged into the glowing ball. suddenly another man wearing a black robe appeared and said in a small voice, "good job young death you will make a great death!!!". The person in the other robe was death. He was finding young people and forcing them to do his every will until they were great enough to replace him before he was caught stealing live souls from innocent people. Ash was the greatest one out of the five deaths in training because he was the only one that if he didnt do what he was told he would have a very slow and painful death. In the bodies pocket was a note for Ash. This note was a way to get out of the great mess he was in. It had 17 words that formed a riddle that said "Under the fire 10th one you see do up the the latch to see all you need". Ash was confused because there were lots of fires where he was living. After a hour of thiniking he decided that he should go to the fire with 10 bricks because the 10th brick is said to be haunted. Sneakily, Ash rode back down the road to the church fire in the cellar of the church. He slid his hand across the bricks until he found the ne that pushed in. The whole fire grew bigger and the bricks began to part. Puffs of smoke came rushing from down the fire hole. Ash's' feet began to move into the fire like he was being dragged into it. When he was in the fire he closed the latch and watched the fire form a circle around him. Coughs came shouting out of his mouth as he started to faint. Purple spirals spun around in his head as his mind began to drift off into a dream of getting the other chosen ones and forming a circle then placing their green balls fille with souls and beginning to chant some words to get the souls to come out. As he got deeper into his dream it began to show him more of what to do. The chant got louder and death appeared in the circle of spirits and souls coming to get revenge on him. The chant stopped very suddenly and everyone on the outside of the circle had their robes fade away and their balls turned into a spell book to call spirits and to use the spirits powers. Flames started to appear again and Ash noticed he was out of his dream and back into the fire. For some odd reason not a flame was touching him as if the flames liked him. Suddenly a little furry monster thingy came crawling out of the flames coughing as it crawled over to Ash. It said its name and its name was Gizmo. Yes it is the li'l furry guy off gremlins. well anyway he was now Ash's' new pet. (keeping waiting for chapter 2 of Death)

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