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Another Fight


Author: faideddarkness
ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
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Words: 138
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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i was bored so i wrote this i was watching sameri movie so you get the idea


Another Fight



The swords clashing
Echoing
All across the mountain
The sun setting
The sky turning red
And the moon bleeding
Into the starry night
One last breath
Palms sweating
Hearts screaming
Falling into every swing
Hoping to be the last
Dyeing to be faster
Sparks flying
Flames rising
Beads of sweat into the eyes
Visions blurring
And teeth still grinding
The body becoming desperate
Swinging a punch
Flying a kick
Into the face
Into the stomached
Anything to make stumble
Becoming out breath
No energy left
Stumbling with a pathetic swipe
Stammering to the knees
Eyes closing
Chest pounding
Laying upon the ground
Falling to an agreement
Realizing the match
And feeling the draw
Stabbing swords into the ground
Turning
And walking away
With the intent to return
Another day
Another fight




Submitted on 2010-01-01 01:27:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Wow I didn't think i was going to like it but its not half bad nice job!

Jackz
| Posted on 2010-01-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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