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    dots Submission Name: Heaven isdots
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    Author: BloodChildVagueSoul
    ASL Info:    26 / m / singapore
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 44/65/18
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 357
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    dotsHeaven isdots
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    Heaven is, here... sitting quietly by your side...
    stopping time with every heartbeat.
    Quietly in embrace...
    with hushed voices whispering sweet nothings.

    Heaven is, here... laying quietly in your company...
    your fingers slowly caressing through my hair.
    Cooed by your smile...
    my beacon through empty darkness.

    Heaven is, here... right by your side...
    listening contently to your lalluby.
    The warmth of your body... my poison... my remedy...
    etched deep into memory... imprisoning me.

    Heaven is where my heart is...
    Heaven is right here beside you...
    Heaven is...

    where I belong.




    Submitted on 2010-01-01 10:11:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is beautiful... I enjoy the way you portray your lover as your own peice of heaven. It seems like you put a lot of heart and soul into this write. I myself am a writer on the darker side... I love finding poets capable of writting about more happier subjects. Nicely done...keep it up the good work!
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    | Posted on 2010-01-02 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


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