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    dots Submission Name: Hide behind..dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/378
    Words: 216
    Class/Type: Rant/Mirror or Mask
    Total Views: 474
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    Go to work!
    Take this shit we throw at you,
    because we're the ignorant once,
    we're the ones who don't know you but think we do!!

    Begin another 8hr shift after finishing one at your other job,
    chug that energy drink like you've never done before,
    paint that clown face on...
    Don't you dare forget that smile!!

    Because you know that's what you and I hide behind!
    Hiding behind the tears of a clown,
    I am,
    Forever I will be,
    For no one knows my pain,
    and those fears that take over me...

    Yet I GO TO WORK!
    Take this shit we throw at you,
    because we're the ignorant once,
    we're the ones who don't know you but think we do!!

    hiding behind the face of a clown,
    I have been!
    Painting on its smile, is my daily routine

    The attitude must come with don't misunderstand this,
    I hide behind the face of a clown,
    with many years of experience!

    Taking the true expressions of a clown and using them to benefit me is what I do!!
    For I do not know any other way!

    I hide behind the tears of a clown,
    I hide behind the smile of a clown,
    I hide behind the happiness of a clown,




    Submitted on 2010-01-01 13:40:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hello my friend, it's been a minute. Happy New Year first off.
    Now WOW!!! All of us hide behind a mask, whether it's the mask of a clown, the mask of the strong one, the mask of the child, the painter the writer whatever. We all hide apart of ourselves away trying somehow to keep that vulnerable part of us, that true part of us safe from further harm... And you have written this struggle very well here.

    ............................but one day you'll have to let the mask slip even if just for a moment , when someone else will have that brief chance to see.............YOU and all the wonderful glory of who you are.

    Well done.. I hope to read more soon, I've missed talking to you,

    always
    Heather
    | Posted on 2010-01-01 00:00:00 | by trynfinity | [ Reply to This ]


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