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    dots Submission Name: hung it overdots

    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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       " so hang me out to dry, you're perly like the whites, the whites of your eyes."

    it is about drinking. this poem is supposed to capture the truth behind it.

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    dotshung it overdots

    I got to whisper to you.
    the sound of buzzing in my ear.
    it's hard sometimes to notice you
    when all of you disappear.

    I got to smile at you
    cus it's always going to hurt.
    but in the end we noticed
    this was never going to work.

    you with your downward spirls
    and me from above.
    you with your abandoned hopes and dreams
    and me left without any love.

    the smell of vomit and you
    always seemed to mix.
    it seems to me thats
    there was no problems you couldn't fix.

    I smell you on my breath.
    and it's all is coming out.
    you with your ways and lack of knowledge
    will always let us down.

    so take a swig of yourself.
    we matched shoulder to shoulder.
    a funtime in a bottle
    and we hung it over.

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