Rain

Author: ModestyB Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 64 /38 /31 Words: 79

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Rain

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The sun shines, I prefer the rain It hides the tears, but not the pain Since you’ve been gone, the days are so lonely The nights I can get through, only By hugging brown bear Imagining you’re there With me in our bed Instead Of being in your grave From which you, I could not save The sun still shines And I, still cry.

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It was like you was in my head, lived lost NowWhat! Thank you for your words.... I feel less AlOnE.

| Posted on 2010-01-09 00:00:00 | by CryBaby | [ Reply to This ]

The RAin is the only place I can still feel his touch!

| Posted on 2010-01-09 00:00:00 | by CryBaby | [ Reply to This ]

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