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    dots Submission Name: Mind Controldots
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    Author: ModestyB
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    dotsMind Controldots
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    Is it what we hear or what we see
    That makes up our communal knowledge?
    Is it what we’re told or what we’re shown
    That makes us believe the impossible?

    Every day we’re brainwashed
    Told what to like and what we must not.
    We have to eat this, but definitely not that.
    We must like him but, sadly, not her.

    What we must do is listen to our own minds,
    Decide for ourselves what to do.
    Let no-one tell us how to live.
    We deserve better.

    Turn off the TV, don’t read the papers,
    Start trusting in our instincts
    We know what we like
    Just as our ancestors did.




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      i have been thinking about communal knowledge for a decade and not once heard it in a poem so congrats... however... in the greater volumes of human resource when it comes to instinctual morals or ethical standards it is a pretty common substance to say that man has no innate value, potential sure but that is the problem of evil, i suppose though that you have a critical contradiction as the theme, you have to be in the community to believe the impossible but you only want individuality, india had that once then they got Siddhartha Gautama
    | Posted on 2010-01-10 00:00:00 | by guruleocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      very true, we are what we are taught to be. does freedome of mind and soul excist or are we taught to believe in that as well? well written, i really like the comparissons in the first and second stanza. kool :)
    | Posted on 2010-01-07 00:00:00 | by insanegemini | [ Reply to This ]


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