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    dots Submission Name: Loves Loserdots
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    Author: ModestyB
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 64/38/31
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLoves Loserdots
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    When love is lost what happens next
    to those with broken hearts
    when all hope is gone
    and sadness comes
    where do people look
    for comfort and for warmth
    do they wish for another love
    or give up altogether

    When happiness goes astray
    and life seems not worth living
    will anger take the place
    of kindness
    and goodwill
    will they tell themselves lies
    of other people’s sins
    never admitting their own

    Too scared to trust in others
    to seek the truths of life
    fear is all pervading
    fear of failure is rife
    to put their life in hands
    that take and then destroy
    all hope

    If they look for consolation in harmony
    of soul with nature they’ll find
    hidden beauties revealed
    If they look for the rainbow
    instead of the rain
    love that is true will find them
    and fortune will smile once again





    Submitted on 2010-01-01 15:54:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like every thing about this poem the words the way its set up all around good write!
    | Posted on 2010-01-04 00:00:00 | by BlackBloodDrop | [ Reply to This ]


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