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    dots Submission Name: Free Spiritdots
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    Author: ModestyB
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 64/38/31
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsFree Spiritdots
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    A spirit that’s free will soar to the light
    And go wherever it pleases
    To far off lands and places
    It crosses the seas with ease
    From the heavens above
    Down to the depths of hell
    And see what’s at the earth’s core
    Faraway stars to be explored
    Galaxies of spiralling light
    Weave their spell

    But why is this spirit so free
    Is there nothing to hold it down
    No body to keep it earthbound
    Cord snapped between flesh and soul
    Freedom equals serenity
    If this is death I have no fear
    Just sadness for those who held me dear
    But together we’ll be once again
    When we are all free from the pain
    Of living in an unfair world




    Submitted on 2010-01-01 15:59:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very good expression, and the form, and theme is very good indeed.

    Very well written indeed.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2010-03-09 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This truly is beautiful!!!! I really like the way your words "moved together" if you know what i mean. Keep it up!! i want more!
    | Posted on 2010-01-02 00:00:00 | by cherrywillow | [ Reply to This ]


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