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    dots Submission Name: lights of raindots

    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    28/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 204/326/124
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       i had a dream about a little girl, she had been through some tragedy, even i'm not sure what. it could have been loss of a friends, family or relative abuse, almost anything... the rain had fallen an she wished for it to keep raining to cry, but she wanted the lgith so she could cry an be happy for being strong enough to actually cry instead of holding it in, while surrounded by darkness. in a way i have been like this a lot in my life. i have wanted to cry an did so only in the covering darkness, never to cry during the day or when i wanted to. so in a way i guess this comes from deep within myself.

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    dotslights of raindots

    i would like...
    i would like to part the clouds,
    part them during a heavy rain...

    to see if the sun really would shine...
    or if it hide behind the darkness,
    the darkness that seems to ease ones self...

    for one can only hope...
    that the light will eventually reach them,
    somehow during the fall of rain...

    thou most of the time...
    there is just more darkness after the fall,
    to those who are in the most need of the light...

    to those who cry...
    these nights of falling tears,
    what do you cry for?

    do you cry for yourself?
    or for the people around you in this world?
    or do you cry for the sake of tears?

    what ever the reason may be...
    do not fear the shedding of tears,
    for they lead to peace within yourself...

    a peace...
    that not many can find,
    so cherish the times...

    for the day will come...
    that when the rain isn't covered in darkness,
    an someone will part the clouds...

    an show you...
    that the sun doesn't hide,
    an let you see the light once more...

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      I was honestly moved to tears with this peice. I've felt like this many times... It sort of reminds me of that one line in one of my favorite movies "The Crow"...... ~"It doesn't have to rain all the time." This is deeply moving because I'm sure almost everyone has had these feelings running through their minds at one point in time. I also like the questions you ask...
    *do you cry for yourself?
    or for the people around you in this world?
    or do you cry for the sake of tears?
    ...crying for the sake of tears, not many understand what thats all about..but I do...
    Great work, KUDOS!
    | Posted on 2010-01-03 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]

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