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    dots Submission Name: Just Like Thisdots

    Author: Kaichou
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 1/2/2
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 599
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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       It's hard trying to convey all these emotions that seem to boil inside of me.
    I'm angry.
    Just like a raging red sort of anger.
    It's more like a dark, silent anger that I can't seem to release.
    Then with that anger comes a sense of regret and sorrow.
    It's confusing, but the only thing I can do right now is... write.
    I can't blame anyone but myself anymore.

    Go ahead and bash it, I simply wrote for my own pleasure.
    Writing is my attempt at releasing my feelings.

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    dotsJust Like Thisdots

    It's fine just like this.
    You have your back to me.
    I have my eyes on your back.
    I hope you understand
    that I only ever did all this
    for your own good.
    I'm a sinful black little thing.
    I'll burn through your radiance
    If it means making myself suffer
    I'll do so
    as long as you stay just like this.
    Always smile even if I'm not there.
    Keep flying like I were never there.
    A hole has consumed me.
    I want to cry out.
    But I know that you'll never hear me.
    It's okay.
    You cried,
    so I have to pretend I'm strong.
    Just like this..
    so I can watch you without you ever knowing.
    I'm sorry
    that I lied so many times to you.
    You are the only one
    who saw the real me.
    However I wore a mask
    so you wouldn't see my ugly face.
    You'd surely scream in fright
    and run away from me.
    Good and evil
    were never meant to mix
    You and I could never be anyways.
    It's better if I just left
    early on like this.
    But I'm already too late.
    Feelings sprouted from the soil beneath our feet.
    But you can forget about yours quickly.
    You'll find someone else to hold.
    I won't be able to.
    If you stay just like this,
    it'll always hurt.
    If you stay just like this,
    I won't ever forget you.
    It's fine just like this.

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      "that I lied so many times to you.
    You are the only one
    who saw the real me.
    However I wore a mask
    so you wouldn't see my ugly face.
    You'd surely scream in fright
    and run away from me.
    Good and evil"

    This small paragraph inspired the hell out of me, and kind of rang true. I can honestly relate to what your saying.
    Sometimes it's so hard to be yourself, so you have the alter ego and hide it all away. Put on your mask, and be someone your not. But eventually the lies catch up to you, and your nothing in the end. I think you explained it well in simple short words.

    "However I wore a mask
    so you wouldn't see my ugly face."

    This may be the best line of the whole thing. A line that holds more meaning than the whole thing. At least it stood out to me.
    I mean, were only human and wow, I'm at a lost for words. I don't think anyone will ever be perfect, but we shouldn't hide ourselves beneath a mask of beauty and perfection. I think were human for a reason and we all make mistakes. hiding just makes you feel even uglier for it all. Uglier, than you ever were.
    An ugly lie.

    It seems like your lost.
    Looking for a way out.
    Looking for yourself.

    Sorry for my rant.
    | Posted on 2010-01-16 00:00:00 | by TasteMyRainbow | [ Reply to This ]

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