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    dots Submission Name: Another One Downdots
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    Author: Survivor_Dean
    ASL Info:    42/M/Minnesota
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 165/186/124
    Words: 390
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 571
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    Description:
       This one is dedicated to all the freinds that have taken their own lives over the years


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    I try the best I can to get over this depression
    It seems to do no good, at least thats my impression
    I feel the same way every day no matter what I do
    I need to shake this feeling off, that I know is true

    I dont know how much longer I can stand the pain
    I have too many thoughts running through my brain
    I cant seem to get them straight no matter what I try
    Another friend just killed himself, and nobody knows why

    I didnt think he had it bad, at least compared to me
    Must have been something that no one else could see
    He had a temporary problem but used a permanent solution
    Now there is no way he can ever get absolution

    But thats the way it is sometimes, Ill never understand
    Why some people choose to end it all with their own hand
    I know that things in life can suck this I know for sure
    But taking your own life sure is not the cure

    Oh, I have considered it, at least a time or two
    Most people have, they just dont carry through
    Some just write poetry for everyone to see
    You have to do what it takes to set your mind free

    Every day you hear about it, there was another suicide
    Its too late to help someone after they already died
    Always try to be the one thats there for all your friends
    Maybe you could be the one to talk to before it ends

    I know how it feels when you are so all alone
    Nobody around to talk to, not even on the phone
    So I write these depressing poems to get the feelings out
    Sometimes driving down the road I have to scream and shout

    Just read the words I write, you will understand
    Things dont always turn out just the way you planned
    But your life can go on; sure youll feel some pain
    But it sure beats the hell out of a bullet in the brain

    Time will heal all your wounds, just hang on to see
    Eventually you will heal thats what they tell me
    So Im hanging on, going from day to day
    Because in all reality .I just want to stay




    Submitted on 2010-01-02 15:45:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A noble poem. I really liked it, the thought put in and the message in general.
    | Posted on 2010-01-02 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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