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    dots Submission Name: At nightdots

    Author: sparkleshine
    Elite Ratio:    0.86 - 27/19/13
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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    dotsAt nightdots

    Looking up at the sky I see a shooting star pass by
    It makes me think of you and everything we have ever been through and how fast it all has gone by
    Upon that shooting star I mad e a wish
    Praying that we will always remain the same
    Looking at you, talking to you
    I see itís true
    I acknowledge that you truly care
    You promise nothing will ever change
    That you will be here besides me forever
    You are here to stay
    We both want to be in each otherís lives forever
    And talking with you I know itís true
    But what do we do when that special someone comes between us
    Of course I wish you the best of luck
    Day after day you say you are here to hold me tight
    I love you and care about you more than words can ever say
    I want everything to be okay
    Wish to be with you night and day
    I will forever love you
    No matter what you say or what you do
    Know this will always be true

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