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    dots Submission Name: Envydots
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    Author: Plegias
    ASL Info:    17/ male/ my house
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 37/23/40
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsEnvydots
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    Sitting there in the room alone,
    Watching while someone takes your throne,
    You sit there plotting,
    You sit there trusting,

    You know that one day you will take it back,
    And on that day you will attack
    Not the man's body, not his mind,
    But instead the heart and what's inside.

    It's how low you go,
    It's how you perserve your ego,
    It's what keeps you alive,
    What kills you while you "survive."

    It's envy's end.




    Submitted on 2010-01-03 11:18:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really good poem, I really liked it, but trusting doesn't seem to fit with the poem's idea...

    scheming, hatching, planning, conspiring those all kind of fit with the theme of the poem a little better, but that's just my opinion.

    Great job!
    | Posted on 2010-01-04 00:00:00 | by curiosityskitty | [ Reply to This ]


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