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    Author: DearlyDeparted
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 211/290/189
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       not finished yet... wanted to start it before i lost my train of thought


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    Gental hands gliding across my skin,
    making my body thrum with an untame beat.
    Eyes that burrow into the depths of my heart,
    melting the black ice that surrounds it.
    The glow of your skin acts as a beakon leading the way in my darkest moments.
    I become lost in the sensual scent of sweat that drips from your body as you move over me.
    Your breath caresses my neck letting warmth slip between my breasts.
    My body begins to quiver as your hips nessle snug against my inner thighs.
    I close my eyes and listen to the rythimic pathern of your pulse as it starts to race.





    Submitted on 2010-01-03 12:22:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Pretty cool description and choice of words.I don't think the form for it is right though, just me.Anyways I got titles.If you ever get stuck not having one.I could give you a short blacklist on some.

    RG.
    | Posted on 2010-09-05 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow..... Great start!!! Keep working on it

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-01-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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