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    dots Submission Name: dreamer you got it.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 852
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    dotsdreamer you got it.dots
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    dream higher than anyone.
    you deserve nothing but the best.
    so what if others have failed to love you?
    learn and go stronger than the rest.

    its great to get back my muse.
    with those bright knowing eyes.
    the speckles of green haunt my memories
    but you deserve to fly.

    so spread your wings and take flight.
    know that you can fly far.
    dreamer hold tight.
    and reach towards your stars.

    let nothing hold you back.
    be all that you can be.
    and when the traveling gets rough.
    know you can always come back to me.

    it deosn't matter I'm in his arms.
    cus austin you have your life to make.
    take the frist step in the right direction
    give more than you will take.

    now smile that smile of yours
    and go on and show the world you.
    i'll be here to catch you if you fall.
    cus that what friends do.




    Submitted on 2010-01-04 00:52:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Rachi, you astound me with your writing ability. I don't agree with BigRed at all, I feel that this was a well-paced, fantastic read. I know that you mean well, and, I never meant to avoid you, I just needed some time. I thank you for this wonderful poem, you are amazing!
    | Posted on 2010-01-06 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. Well I like the idea behind this. However I feel that it is a little slow. Not in the way that some poem are meant to be read slow. I feel like this is not supposed to be a slow as it actually is. It is the choppiness of that content. I can see that you tried to make it rhyme, but it does not need to. in fact for this peice I'd even recommend that it does not. Keep up the good work. I am going to read some of your other posts.
    | Posted on 2010-01-04 00:00:00 | by BigRed | [ Reply to This ]


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