Rachi, you astound me with your writing ability. I don't agree with BigRed at all, I feel that this was a well-paced, fantastic read. I know that you mean well, and, I never meant to avoid you, I just needed some time. I thank you for this wonderful poem, you are amazing!
I like this. Well I like the idea behind this. However I feel that it is a little slow. Not in the way that some poem are meant to be read slow. I feel like this is not supposed to be a slow as it actually is. It is the choppiness of that content. I can see that you tried to make it rhyme, but it does not need to. in fact for this peice I'd even recommend that it does not. Keep up the good work. I am going to read some of your other posts.