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    dots Submission Name: The Princess Elfdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 306
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Princess Elfdots

    Hello Elfin he said

    Captivated by her delicate and sylph demeanour
    Smiling eyes of ageless shinning
    All tousled dark hair
    And flower braids on alabaster skin
    While in the snow drop dew
    He felt his heart melting

    With the twitch of some fading shyness
    She bolstered up on some sense
    Of dare to
    Perhaps a little confused
    But still a teasing humour enthused
    At her own misplacement in the senses, sense of order
    Brought her own bright energy of disorder

    So much love, he thought
    As if the ages flowed in translucent veins
    So much courage and strength contained
    In this sweet slip of a girl
    So much glowing passion
    To make his heart beat upon its rapid intoxication
    On the sound of her excited giggle
    And in the snow drop dew
    He felt his soul
    Drifting into the quiet autumn pools
    Of hypnotic sighs

    So tall and muscular he felt beside her
    Some ancient Knight he might have been there
    And in his fibre
    Wanted ever to protect her
    To hold her safe
    In this her exuberant freedom
    Should she need it
    Gladly he would give and be her guardian

    His prize and treasure simply to watch
    As this fairy light
    Danced in the deeping forests
    While all her dreams responded
    Coaxed from out their realms
    Where on this moment in the snow drop dew
    He felt his heart and soul did truly melt

    Quiet now; the pounding of his pulse
    The whisper of her voice
    Soothes and slips him from the troubles of thought
    And on the leaves in barefoot she leads
    Into the forest deeps

    There they made their silent pact
    And wedded
    There they stay of naked love
    Dancing together endlessly

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