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    dots Submission Name: RAINdots

    Author: Deedaat
    ASL Info:    31/m/SWAT
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/2/2
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 783
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       i don't know what to say about the poem. One thing i want to tell is that my reader should read this poem with a heart.....with a heart full of feelings

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    Rain�s falling
    Dropping, hanging on the serrated edges of a sharp and damp leaf
    Dripping, seeping, damp and moist
    Through and out
    The roof of my roofless home
    Or house of no-dwellers
    The keen, knifelike piercing memories
    Of bygone and departed days,
    Of nights long and mornings, afternoons.
    The life long memories,
    When life and its charms were full of life,
    Of beauty, cheers and joys. A life!
    No life can one find. No more!
    The starlit starry sparkling night of a no-dweller
    Is like a one Confounded, Beguiled and Cheated out of his wits
    Left in the middle of a long protracted journey,
    At sea without a sail!
    Irritating, and slashing is the wind in the sprinkling drizzling,
    Flesh bound to sear and burn,
    In a raging icy fire of no smoke.

    By: Rasheed Ahmad

    Submitted on 2010-01-05 02:24:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      At times our own light goes out and is rekindled by a spark from another person. Each of us has cause to think with deep gratitude of those who have lighted the flame within us.
    It is a great poem but it gives sadness instead of pleasure...

    By Zainab Amjad Qureshi
    | Posted on 2010-02-16 00:00:00 | by rossalie | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a verry interesting write. I love it. It's so full of detail and metaphor. So rich and vibrant. your words paint an amazing picture which is what poetry is about and yet that seems lost anymore. Great piece, keep writing.

    | Posted on 2010-01-07 00:00:00 | by S.A.M. | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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