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    dots Submission Name: My Little Box of Crayonsdots
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    Author: amanda99737
    ASL Info:    16/Girl/Alaska
    Elite Ratio:    1.21 - 14/83/123
    Words: 257
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 554
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    dotsMy Little Box of Crayonsdots
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    With my little box of crayons I'm going to color. Things have been bad and even worse... Blocks were put up and walls were put up to keep them away.

    With my little box or crayons I'm going to color the world a better place.
    I don't care if they send me to a different place.
    I don't care if I stay in a psych ward.

    With my little box of crayons and my small hands I'm going to fix things.
    I'm going to change my life to something better, add a few flowers, why not? The more the merrier.

    I'm going to color such a lot of things... A smile for mommy and a job for daddy. I'm going to color this grey house happy, with my little box of crayons.

    I'll take pink and purple to the living room and make it more like a home.
    I'll take yellow and blue to the skies and erase the rain.

    With my little box of crayons I'm going to color the world a better place.
    I don't care if they send me to a different place.
    I don't care if I stay in a psych ward.

    With my little box of crayons and my small hands I'm going to fix things.
    I'll draw a smile for mommy and a job for daddy.

    I'll make things better, don't worry sissy.

    I'm going to color the world a better place.

    With my little box or crayons.




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      fan freakin tastic, this is an epic waiting
    do it...
    | Posted on 2010-01-18 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      hi this was good
    depression can give you the closed feeling but if these is based on true feelings there alwaz has to be away out

    great writing and word choice

    sandman
    | Posted on 2010-01-08 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem and I can sooo relate.....I wish it was just that easy to fix things sometimes. Too bad its not :(
    | Posted on 2010-01-06 00:00:00 | by Hazel eyes Jess | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a delightful story, full of color, sad, but with optomistic ideals, written with passion and depth of feeling!

    A lot of things in the world need painting, and starting with a little box of crayons is not a bad place to start.

    Your poem shows true artistic talent and your feelings and ideas came across to all of us.
    | Posted on 2010-01-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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