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    dots Submission Name: Don't judge a book by it's cover.dots
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    Author: rosealiehale
    ASL Info:    22/F/Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    1.65 - 72/39/25
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 768
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 588



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    dotsDon't judge a book by it's cover.dots
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    Beauty and grace beyond compare.
    Her light gray eyes and chocolate hair.

    Skin as white as snow,
    Inside a pain that no one knows.

    Her wrists hold a secret dark and deep.
    Others know, but don't make a peep.

    He broke her heart, tore it to shreads.
    Now she's all alone inside her head.
    He wouldn't care if she took another pill.
    No one would, life would go on still.

    And know she's gone and he's to blame.
    now he hangs in his closet ridden in shame.




    Submitted on 2010-01-06 13:54:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is good!
    me likeyy :D
    the ending is sad
    but still
    pretty good
    keep writing :)
    | Posted on 2010-01-09 00:00:00 | by kimirin | [ Reply to This ]


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