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    dots Submission Name: Little book...dots
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    Author: WhatsThat
    Elite Ratio:    0.19 - 0/1/4
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsLittle book...dots
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    My soul lies in this one little book,
    Black and white cover, filled with words
    To fill this with thoughts, the time it took
    Filled with things from me no one’s heard.
    Ink runs through like blood through veins
    My soul on paper; My heart in writing
    The outside looks fine, but inside remains
    Emotions unheard; Kept back in hiding.
    Carried around; A lapdog of paper
    To this I confess, my feelings are said
    My true self in here, where I feel safer
    The number of tears for this book I've shed.
    My soul on paper, where it now belongs,
    My true self, acceptance is what it longs.




    Submitted on 2010-01-07 07:15:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey you win the best description i have read tonight, a lapdog of paper, for a comp book
    words to remember your soul is the thing every poet spends lifetimes defining and the point you touched on with the time that goes into it good, cool stuff...
    don't lose your soul in a book ....
    | Posted on 2010-01-10 00:00:00 | by guruleocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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