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    dots Submission Name: To Grab A Stardots

    Author: InsanityVanity
    ASL Info:    19/male/noneyah
    Elite Ratio:    2.02 - 8/23/28
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsTo Grab A Stardots

    A star so bright
    When she’s in sight
    No longer night
    Her light alone
    The sky is bright
    My chest is tight
    I dare not fight
    Her warm embrace
    I so delight
    Her kiss I might
    Surely take flight
    To a world far greater
    Than any height
    My string drawn home
    A flying kite
    Her glow is hot
    Yet so polite
    No blunder, blight
    No fret or fright
    So close I am
    All is white
    The moments right
    My lip I bite…
    I could never finish
    What I want to write

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