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    dots Submission Name: Road Killdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    dotsRoad Killdots
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    Too often I feel like some kind of hitchhiker
    Waiting for passion, just to pull over

    You with your shoulders pressed
    Your ripped open skirt

    And the vent, pounding, insistent, in my blood

    Standing here with this thirst and dust
    A desert highway, my only direction
    My only destination

    Baking heat
    In the bent and shimmering mirages
    Of my darkest parched

    And the empty plastic cups of unquenched
    Internet love

    A man of gravel
    And melting tarmac
    As I screech on the squealing need for rain

    Promises live in the hearts of cactus
    But for their own delusion
    The impossible spines are made

    To dig inside their irritation, of want

    Sun burnt, by the side of the road
    Cooking with the trash and litter
    On the cavitations of my soul
    The blank white sun beats

    And just one drop of reality
    For me
    Not to be imaginary
    In her kiss






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      great lines
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    cacti
    | Posted on 2010-01-13 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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