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    dots Submission Name: A Wolf's Love.dots
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    Author: Xiallia
    ASL Info:    17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 3/23/32
    Words: 932
    Class/Type: Story/Fuck it all
    Total Views: 318
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 5479



    Description:
       These are one of my late-night shit writings
    So don't kill me for anything and shit allright?
    all-fucking-right


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    dotsA Wolf's Love.dots
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    Music; System of a Down-Toxicity
    Mood: Apathetic -_\


    Wandering through the moonlit woods of night, there lied a young girl.
    Tattered and torn, she only a few years old.
    Abandoned by those that once loved her she layed slowly dying.

    In his slow stride he walked, his grey fur gently flowing against the wind as the strands seemed to dance, from root to end.
    On all fours and nose to the ground he picked up a scent of fresh blood.
    tilting his furry head in curiosity he slowly padded over to it. Growing stronger with each wolfish stride he took, branches and dead leaves crushing under each step until he came upon the young girl.

    The young human one used the last of her dying strength to fix her eyes on the furred one. Mumbling her words of aid, and her vision soon faded into a black. Bones broken, and blood insanely low, of which it surrounded her body in an circle, flowing down to the wolf's claw.

    Taking pity on her he shook his head and then raise it to the sky, letting out one of the most lovely howls known to his followers and allies miles around, as his so called friends surrounded the small girl they let out a small growl. Of course she looked like food but no.
    He saved her this night for 'some' reason a reason that shall not be known on this night to anyone but him.



    Years pass and the young girl is taken care of by him.
    fully recovering in 6 years, the young girl he first found was not a young one anymore, but a young woman, and now he is enchanted by her most, lovely womanly features.

    When she first awaken she was somewhat surprised and scared of her saviors appearence.
    But of course it was a Wolf, but no....it was something else, Wolf nor Human.
    He was what you might call an Anthropomorphic creature.
    Though, only a few of his close allies were these, but everyone else, was not, just regular wolves.

    His voice spoken very human like, though even hearing him speak, was enough to strike a small fearfulness in your heart.
    His stride. His voice, the simple look in his eyes.
    He was not one you'd want to toy with.

    Over the next few years he took her under his wing as his first human student. And soon she herself became as deadly as him.
    Though she wasn't feared. She was not to be underestimated by none.

    Watching his young apprentice grow into the most talented warrior yet, he could not help to long for her. Something more than what they have now....

    Gracfully flying through the trees, She climbed grinning, reaching the top of the tree in no time flat. Jumping off the highest branch onto the lower one she looked around, making a fatal mistake. Slipping and falling down.
    She quickly let out a loud whistle, Her Anthro Master came running for her.
    Though lucky for her he was not to far.
    Jumping into the air he allowed her to attach to his back.
    Landing safely onto the ground he shook his head.
    "Careful.....so Reckless...."
    He said to her as she simply sat on his back.
    "Sorry....."


    Later in the night she was found bathing in the river, He watched her every time she did so. Although this time he decided to join her. Her wet long black hair draped onto her shoulders and down pass her breast, covering the fairly small mounds.
    Sighing she looked up to the moon over-head as she stroked her hair, humming and losing herself in her thoughts.

    He padded into the water slowly and coming up behind her, touching her shoulder lightly in hopes of not to scare her.
    "Enjoying yourself?" He inquired as she turned to face him, her head down with a small red flush over-coming her cheeks.

    He inclined his head with a wolfish grin tugging at his wolven face.
    "Nervous of me again? To think you'd grown used to me being close after all these years."

    "Heh, well I'm sorry, but you are my Master of course. So why should I not be nervous of you?"
    She looked up to him with a small smile.
    Their gaze intertwining their souls as one.

    "I'm sure you know....What the feeling I have for you is."
    He let his grin fall to a gentle expression in his eyes.

    "Then express it....My feeling is the same for my Master as he feels for his student as well."
    A gentle embrace of lips under the moonlit sky was enough for the two.

    Though many not approve of this, His Anthropomorphic Allies were the ones that despised it in the first place.
    So at moment he pushed his new-found lover's head into the water to have her avoid the incoming arrows.

    And in the quick of an eye they both were gone.

    Hours of running, Days of hiding.
    soon came to an end.


    An arrow pierced her chest, and soon everything would come to an end for his lover.
    With the last uttered words from her to him.
    He went for revenge.
    Soon dying himself leaving the world with the same words as she gave to him.

    "I Love You....."




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      The ending was very sad. I was a bit upset about it, but I do love myself a well written story so I enjoyed this. A few pointers to improve (in my opinion): Maybe a bit more detail throughout the story explaining the bond the two had. Or perhaps how they were ended. I did like the fact that no real names were mentioned. It gave the characters an air of mystery and secrecy. Maybe not make the time laspe so large as well. Other than a few minor things here and there I loved it. It had my attention from beginning to end.
    | Posted on 2010-02-23 00:00:00 | by Fushen | [ Reply to This ]
      No! No! No! -rants and stomps her foot, tossing her hands in the air- You go back and make those two live! Yes...suck them into a hole in the water! Or something. Blast. Blast those arrows. Blast cruelty! Blast all kinds of things like well-woven yet horrendously sad endings. -sobs restlessly- I was like...oh...pretty, then BAM! No! No! No! -goes back to ranting-


    I'm a little...eh...about the breakings. But it's a quick read and easy to follow, more or less. It captured my attention, and I didn't get distracted as I was reading it. Which says a lot with me. I get distracted easily. Yes, yes, I do.


    Nice write, Sai-Bells.
    | Posted on 2010-01-11 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very beautiful and powerful love story. I really enjoyed how you carried its plot over years so quickly. That definitely made it more enjoyable to read since I didn't need to devote an hour or more to reading it. Very well written.
    | Posted on 2010-01-10 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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