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    dots Submission Name: X Porn Stardots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 371
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    So you posed naked in a magazine
    Showed all the boys something they’d never seen

    I’ve seen the pictures
    I know the score
    And all the things you did before
    Yes I’ve seen the shots
    The triple X explicit to

    They say you were a dirty whore
    They say you always wanted to
    And they say you always wanted more

    You’re getting older now and there seems some doubt
    Why all your sex was coming out
    Why you let so many people see
    Why you enjoyed it all so much
    This liberty
    Your sexuality

    But sweetheart I don’t know if you can see
    None of it makes any difference to me
    You always were
    And always will be
    A heart stopping raging beauty

    It could have been bullets
    It could have been the gun
    It could have been just death and continual destruction
    But instead you let them see
    The way your eyes burned
    When your pleasure made you come

    An elegant animal
    All hair; legs and breasts
    A woman of figure
    And the sensually depicted

    Your getting older now, but honey don’t regret
    How you gave yourself to life
    In the fullest sense
    Don’t you think that I can see
    Who you are
    And what you came to be
    And always were
    And always will be
    A heart pounding raging beauty

    So my love
    Let the judgements just slip away
    Let them keep their petty torments for another day
    Let them think that they could be
    So much better than you and me
    And while they’re supping in all the hate
    Know you were better in your love
    Not one bullet
    Not one bomb
    Not one finger coiled around the trigger of a gun

    An angel of flesh and bone
    You are and were a celebration
    Of that sexual need
    Of that shudder and groan inside very living human

    And sweetheart I don’t know if you can see
    None of it makes any difference to me
    So you posed naked in a magazine
    Showed all the boys something they’d never seen
    You always were
    And always will be
    A heart thumping raging beauty







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      Good write.

    I really enjoy your use of words.

    I felt that you were protecting the porn star, I could agree if it were only pictures, but I believe fornication for glamour is wrong and degrades what should be a miriaculous experience.

    It sounds as if the star has her doubts as well and feels some remorse...as in the Solomens proverbs he says...Like a gold ring in a pigs snout is a woman with no discretion...

    I enjoyed this...

    Thanks
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by orpheus | [ Reply to This ]


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