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    dots Submission Name: Blue White Light dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 280
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    dotsBlue White Light dots
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    Itís a chill wind
    Blowing around the corners
    Of your mind
    Sweeping tendrils in your soul
    Howling like you ought to know

    And in the teeth of the truth
    You can feel yourself

    SNAP !

    And thereís no time for looking back
    Redemption is a postcard you sent yourself
    Something you delivered
    To save yourself

    SNAP !

    Do you feel the cold
    And all the lies you have told
    While the world you built
    Supports denial
    The truth is burning
    In the souls you stirred

    And its getting closer now
    Thereís no turning back
    The hurricane is coming
    You made it with your heart

    The agony of saints
    Draws closer now

    SNAP !

    Do you feel the warmth
    As it floods its words onto your tongue
    Can you feel the tear
    Burning with the acid of everything you feel

    Does it fill your eyes
    With a beauty you canít describe
    With the sudden YANK into yourself
    Do you hit the centre
    Do you touch the core

    SNAP !


    Hhhmmmmmmmmmmmm

    Is it slow

    M o t i o n

    As your thoughts are one

    Heart and soul

    As you become

    And as you are reaching for the beauty

    All you

    See

    Is

    Love



    SNAP !



    The chord connects


    And


    We


    Are


    One















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