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    dots Submission Name: Dear Sir.........dots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Alone
    Total Views: 886
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1350



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       I know, this is different. I just felt like writing him a letter, and this is what I ended up with. But this is not 100% true. I'm not getting paranoid. There's no way for him to follow me. But, comments please.

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    dotsDear Sir.........dots
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    Dear Sir,
    You say I haunt your dreams, but I find that hard to believe, since you are always haunting mine. Each waking moment is filled with you as well, your eyes and your smile. If I love you is all you need to hear, then fine. Yes, I love you, is that better? But no, it never is, is it? Everyone wants more than just I love you.

    Sincerely,
    .....................


    Dear Sir,
    I saw you again last night, the same dream that you claimed to have about me a few days before. You and me, laying together in the barracks. I am no where near barracks sir, so why are these thoughts coming to me? I ask you, are you purposely putting these thoughts in my head? I am struggling against them, but it seems as if I can't get away from them.

    Sincerely,
    .....................


    Dear Sir,
    I am afraid I have become paranoid. I can not sleep because I am afraid to see your face. I see your eyes everywhere I go, following me. And I am begging you sir, please, go away. Leave me be, get out of my dreams. When I close my eyes, I want to see darkness, not your eyes, not my light. Because through your eyes you bring me pain.

    Sincerely,
    ....................


    Dear Sir...........




    Submitted on 2010-01-11 09:43:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this would be more accurate thing to comment on as being a thing that can yield cool response, screwtape...
    | Posted on 2010-01-13 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      This has quite the feeling of desperation and forbidden love intertwinned in it.. She seems to be very much in love with her "sir", yet she also seems Great write sweetie!
    | Posted on 2010-01-11 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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