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    Author: Drea
    ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 289/142/53
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Come, I beseech thee, please take stroll with me
    Let us laugh and be jolly, as we mask what is beneath-
    The persona, the smile, simply illusion
    Truly residing in the state of Confusion

    Scouring my talents, trying to find an outlet
    Finding nothing, descending into debt
    Twist and turns, my mind is a crowded maze
    I write to unload, to make it through the days

    I force this pen to bleed the words my mouth can’t speak
    Help me put to paper the pain my mind can’t ease
    An immortal engravement of infinite sorrow
    These thought’s will live on—‘morrow to ‘morrow—




    Submitted on 2010-01-12 03:39:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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