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    dots Submission Name: Crank beat funk blues dots
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    Author: leocrates
    Elite Ratio:    4.95 - 103/34/38
    Words: 525
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 926
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 3600



    Description:
       for any who read the earlier stuff sorry for the misspelling of lunatic and anyway i changed the title for submission secondly i rarely work with punctuation because one i would prefer the reader work out their own rhythm and it always ends up like a EEcummin=gs


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    dotsCrank beat funk blues dots
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    Low low g
    Low high
    Up
    And up up
    dig
    Follow all the junkies
    Play out all the games
    But waste is only your every
    Saving like dead leaves
    And stars appear nightly

    We are the center
    Because there is only substituted
    Mentality and freak outs
    Frequency like over drive
    Or over cooked green beans
    Or set ups
    And entrapment
    Suspected judgment and assassination

    There is no forgiveness for the weak
    Only fear and retribution
    Only the ignorance of the folly
    We need not wait
    We donít want
    And donít see
    Iíll ill it for yaíll sometime
    Maybe

    Spill sulfur match tips
    Burning
    Like plasma phosphorus
    Cartoon amazement
    And condemned to suffering
    They they
    All if they or any
    They for all and finally
    We die
    We die
    We die
    And die like pigs in Jewish kosher
    We sledge and pipe nail
    Last places and evil like looking
    Set up thick skins for deep old drum cores

    I donít wail
    Old spiritual
    Or banjo
    I donít know civil
    Or well
    I donít remember
    I donít remember
    There is no peace for minds
    I think
    We get drawn into the war
    Battles out of badlands
    And south west prisons of waterless drought
    Hot hot girls
    Nudes
    And mazes of Halloweenís costume

    Our up is always dizzy
    Our down is out as well

    Ukraine and a tease
    Debt and resurrection
    There is no god
    There is no god
    You and all of you
    You
    and all of you


    Low low g
    Low high
    Up
    And up up
    dig
    Follow all the junkies
    Play out all the games
    But waste is only your every
    Saving like dead leaves
    And stars appear nightly

    We are the center
    Because there is only substituted
    Mentality and freak outs
    Frequency like over drive
    Or over cooked green beans
    Or set ups
    And entrapment
    Suspected judgment and assassination

    There is no forgiveness for the weak
    Only fear and retribution
    Only the ignorance of the folly
    We need not wait
    We donít want
    And donít see
    Iíll ill it for yaíll sometime
    Maybe

    Spill sulfur match tips
    Burning
    Like plasma phosphorus
    Cartoon amazement
    And condemned to suffering
    They they
    All if they or any
    They for all and finally
    We die
    We die
    We die
    And die like pigs in Jewish kosher
    We sledge and pipe nail
    Last places and evil like looking
    Set up thick skins for deep old drum cores

    I donít wail
    Old spiritual
    Or banjo
    I donít know civil
    Or well
    I donít remember
    I donít remember
    There is no peace for minds
    I think
    We get drawn into the war
    Battles out of badlands
    And south west prisons of waterless drought
    Hot hot girls
    Nudes
    And mazes of Halloweenís costume

    Our up is always dizzy
    Our down is out as well

    Ukraine and a tease
    Debt and resurrection
    There is no god
    There is no god
    You and all of you
    You
    and all of you




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