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    dots Submission Name: Dear Johndots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 424
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
    Total Views: 806
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    Bytes: 2159



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       I played with the same I did with Dear Sir. Unlike Dear Sir, sadly this is 100% real. No exaggerations. Obviously he's in the marines, which gave me the whole Dear John idea.

    G.D.A.


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    dotsDear Johndots
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    Dear John
    I had another dream about you again last night. One of the dreams of my past. The same dream actually. The one I had night after night. That I lay in your arms, sleeping. With you awake, watching me. And slowly kiss me. Do you have the same dream John? It replays in my head all the time. I miss you John......

    Sincerely,
    Tara


    Dear John,
    I'm trying to get you out of my head, but you just won't leave. Can you tell? Can you tell I want to hold on to you forever John? I can't concentrate on anything. I haven't seen you in years, but the fourteen-year-old girl in me is still in love with you. I'm trying to let you go, but I just can't.

    Sincerely,
    Tara


    Dear John,
    You called me yesterday. It's been years since I've heard your voice. You're back in the states, that's good. You also want to see me. It's been even more years since the last time I saw you. Five and a half to be exact. It frightens me, I've been trying so hard to escape my pain associated with you, and you can bring it back with just two words. "Hey Tara".

    Sincerely,
    Tara



    Dear John,
    I want to see you more and more each day. I wonder if you look the same as before. The Korean African-American boy I danced with at the Spirit Dance. The boy I rode the bus with that had the soft black curly hair I used to love to touch. No, the hair is gone, isn't it? The Marines would have made sure of that. Are you still him John?

    Sincerely,
    Tara



    Dear John,
    You asked me if I missed you. I was honest, I told you yes. When you asked me why, I couldn't tell you. I wouldn't tell you. Why would I put both of us through that pain? The same pain I carried around since the first time you messaged me in years. I could tell you that I loved you, but what good would that do us anymore?

    Sincerely,
    Tara




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      i would comment but dear john is not a critical moment...to be critical objectively
    | Posted on 2010-01-13 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]
      Indeed matters of the heart can elevate us to the clouds but also drop us to shatter. I enjoyed this and it kind of appeals to me in a sad way because I am going through a similar emotion curve presently where I have to learn to let go of someone who has obviously changed and moved on but the memories of them is what haunts me. Good write
    | Posted on 2010-01-13 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      This one also has a little of the forbidden love feel to buy, but even more strong is the feeling of longing and loneliness, then hope and loneliness as well. Quite the sad feeling as well that touched my heart deeply. Beautifully written sweetie.
    | Posted on 2010-01-12 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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