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    dots Submission Name: Imaginationdots
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    Author: daughterofdeath
    ASL Info:    23/Female/West Virginia
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 277/293/232
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsImaginationdots
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    I had a dream last night
    of the most beautiful thing.
    Long black wavy hair,
    caramel skin, dark brown eyes,
    so dark they were almost black.
    But they had a shine in them
    as they locked into mine.
    Dimples in each cheek
    as that big smile appeared.
    I ran my hand through that
    beautiful black hair,
    and hugged them close.
    No, this was not a dream of you,
    at least not exactly.
    She looks exactly like you,
    and calls me mom.
    She's the most beautiful thing
    I've ever laid eyes on.
    But I've never seen her,
    not in reality at least.
    I never met her,
    talked to her.
    She's just a figment
    of my imagination.




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      I don't know what it is with this poem, but every time I read it, a shiver goes down my spine. It seems so simply put, words carelessly thrown together, but you must've been having some sort of epiphany when you did. O_O

    I really like it. I can completely imagine the unborn possibility and the discovery of an unknown love and life, at the same time a future inside a person.

    She looks exactly like you,
    and calls me mom.
    She's the most beautiful thing
    I've ever laid eyes on.

    I think this is the best part in it ... the ending was a little meh ... but that part says so much in just a few words.
    :)
    | Posted on 2010-01-26 00:00:00 | by Urisen | [ Reply to This ]


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