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    dots Submission Name: Dance Floordots
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    Author: Cordell
    ASL Info:    36/M/Philadelphia P.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 592/806/391
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 568
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       From my upcoming poem book "Thirty-thr33


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    dotsDance Floordots
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    The feeling of being loved
    Surpasses any feeling at all
    To know you will always be hugged
    Is worth the fall
    To be told you are loved makes you want to sing
    Two lovers, together, forever
    Written on everything
    Hearts here and there
    Your name and their name as well
    The feeling that someone else care
    Is a feeling no one can express or tell
    To share this feeling is the greatest
    To receive it is even greater
    Wish there was a way I could celebrate this
    If I could the world would be my dance floor…




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      I really don't know what to say here. It's an ok poem, I guess but assuming that guy in the avatar is really you. oh boy, I can't really imagine a big guy like that speaking these words. :)
    | Posted on 2010-01-27 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      hey congrats and good luck with the book i don't have one but i want one... ya know....
    but anyway the poem
    it seems tame
    quiet
    sincere
    love-able
    able to be loved
    but most likely i would care to weigh in that it would mostly be by the loved one you know what i mean
    good poem
    not great but good
    | Posted on 2010-01-16 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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