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    dots Submission Name: The Morning Stardots
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    Author: orpheus
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 188/165/57
    Words: 435
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
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       Like most of my writes, but this one has gotten to the heart...I really like the corus, I've beat-boxed the melody for this one and it's one of my better pieces of art :) enjoy x


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    dotsThe Morning Stardots
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    Take a walk with me,
    Through the fire and brimstone.
    Where you'll haunt the scene,
    Father of Liars it's home.
    Through the scorching heat,
    You'll survive it though it's close.
    Eternally for eternity,
    To dance on the flames like a disco. {corus}

    My ode to the devil,
    The one that my soul shouldn't meddle with,
    I keep this low on ya level.
    Knowing that it's only,
    For my soul you would settle.
    Like Goliath,
    You can go and get stoned like a pebble.
    Adversity to murder me,
    S'just honing my metal.
    Try to make me hate myself,
    But I'm home in my temple.
    Play me out as stupid,
    I'm a grown intellectual.
    You're so ineffectual,
    Starting war over me,
    S'my spirits golden like petrol.
    This'll sting a little bit,
    So go and soak this in Detol.
    Trying to lay your hands on me,
    S'like holding a nettle.
    Same as the deceit and the greed,
    That is the dope that you peddle.
    There's no way into that night,
    You'll find me going it gentle.
    I'm bold for the medal,
    You're gung ho in the mental.
    If you're thinking I'm oragami,
    And I'll fold like a petal.
    You have another thing coming,
    Now hit the road and the pedal!

    Take a walk with me,
    Through the fire and brimstone.
    Where you'll haunt the scene,
    Father of Liars it's home.
    Through the scorching heat,
    You'll survive it though it's close.
    Eternally for eternity,
    To dance on the flames like a disco. {corus}

    My poem for the rebel,
    It's a spiritualistic,
    Visual encrypted script,
    From the once lyrical misfit.
    But now I'm focused like a locus,
    Individualistic.
    Welcome to the valley of the real,
    The criminal instincts.
    Like my flow was embezzeled,
    Stolen the show and the tempo,
    Air-Force-One I've flown presidential.
    Though 'cross the globe,
    Not yet known as essential,
    Cursed by the cynical critic.
    But all he see's to be the truth,
    Is a residual image.
    He leaves a mark on their minds,
    Like a digital imprint.
    Reality in this galaxy's,
    A bitter pill swig it,
    Back with some Jack Daniels,
    Famous Tennessee Whisky.
    So while his melody tempts me,
    And my physical's still fit,
    Let me show you 'round the place,
    While Hell is still empty.
    The biblical mist is dispersing,
    No more rehearsing,
    This servant is the Mirical's Emcee!

    Take a walk with me,
    Through the fire and brimstone.
    Where you'll haunt the scene,
    Father of Liars it's home.
    Through the scorching heat,
    You'll survive it though it's close.
    Eternally for eternity,
    To dance on the flames like a disco. {corus}




    Submitted on 2010-01-14 04:47:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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