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    dots Submission Name: Half Emptydots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 701
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       When I promised you my hand, you promised me back snow cherries from france.--Tori Amos


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    dotsHalf Emptydots
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    Why do you speak of dark?
    I look only for light,
    When you call me blind,
    I say, what good is sight?

    Time moves too slowly you say.
    For me it moves too fast.
    You remember every detail,
    Yet, when did you kiss me last?

    I would travel over anything,
    To reach where you are.
    But from where I stand,
    It looks pretty dark.

    You are in a stand still,
    and I am whirling by.
    Reach out to me,
    Please, ask me, Please.

    In your eyes,
    a white dress,
    In mine,
    nothing less.

    Where is that time now?




    Submitted on 2010-01-14 13:59:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      soundtrack in my head:



    (Maybe i didn't understand
    but i still can't believe
    Speed Racer is dead

    so then i thought i'd make some plans

    but fire thought
    she'd really rather be
    water instead

    and

    this is cooling
    faster than i can
    this is
    cooling
    faster than i

    -tori amos)

    hang in there, my Precious One
    things will look up, they will i promise you.

    you are loved.


    -with all my heart-

    mummie
    | Posted on 2010-01-21 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked the first stanza best
    it had a hinge in it
    on
    the line
    when you call me blind

    it affects the word before it
    and effects the word after
    word

    the rest kind of mushes out
    but that is ok it is a love poem apparently
    and love love love all you need is love
    love
    word
    word
    love
    | Posted on 2010-01-16 00:00:00 | by leocrates | [ Reply to This ]


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