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    dots Submission Name: Never said I don't love youdots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 209
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 850
    Average Vote:    3.3333
    Bytes: 1252



    Description:
       Don't ask, just randomly poked into my head as I took a shower. I then took the time to finish the thought as I changed. Ha, hope you enjoyed


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    dotsNever said I don't love youdots
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    I never said I don't love you
    But there wasn't a thing to do
    Oh oh, oh oh
    I never said that I hate you
    But I guess there wasn't enough to say;
    I love you, I love you.

    And you know, it ain't love
    If we spin out of control
    It may be hard, but at least we can try
    To make all this work
    And you know....

    I never said I don't love you
    There's just so much to say
    Oh oh, oh oh
    I never said that I hate you
    But I guess there wasn't enough to say;
    I love you, I love you.

    So get up, and leave this place
    that keeps bringing you down
    You know it ain't lovely
    watching you sit and cry
    Just let me be your savior,
    at least let me try

    I never said I don't love you!
    Never said that I hate you so!
    The answers; it's all that we're searching for.
    Together, together

    I never said I don't love you
    But there wasn't more to say
    no oh, no oh
    I never said that I hate you
    But I guess there wasn't enough to say;
    I love you, I love you.




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    ||| Comments |||
      It made me feel like you were trying to express to the person this was meant for that you loved them, and they just didn't seem to realize it.
    "I love you, I love you" was repeated as songs often do, I loved it. That made me imagine a male singing it, then eventually a female. Then both, you know? That's what happens when I read lyrics. I liked it, I don't criticize and I don't want to criticize this. Alright? Kay. It was good. Try improving your lyrics, though. :D
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by xAngeliquex | [ Reply to This ]
      Such A Lovely Song.
    You Must, And I Mean Must, Sing It Too Me <3
    I Would Love To Hear This In My Ipod In The Near Future ;3

    This Song Made Me Feel All Warm Inside
    You Did A Wonderful Job Dann.

    I Would Love To Read More =]
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by TsukikoHamino | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, you do have a way with words as others say. This is very much musical/lyrical and poetical. Mentally, I see you as playing an instrument as you write the lyrics. If you don't, then I suggest you give that a try. Good Luck.
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by edcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      It's beyond a doubt a song, at least to me. c: A splendid, well written song, may I add. Blowin' 'em out of the water as always, Jimmy.~
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by KotaNashi | [ Reply to This ]
      Its definatly a poem in my eyes. I have to admit, reading this one made me tear up a bit. You have an amzing talent with how you express your feeling into words.

    Its obvious you love someone very much to have written this peice.


    I can't wait to read more!

    ~Becca
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by Aylar | [ Reply to This ]
      I was right all along. You have a way with words. I always love to read what you write. It's like you're painting a picture or something in my mind when I read this. A pretty one, at that.

    I find myself reading it more than once. o.o;
    You really... Get your feelings across with everything you write. Almost like your heart is talking for you.

    Poetry has always been a way to express things that isn't easy to say in normal conversations. It gets things off your chest as you write. For me, it always helped me realize things that I was too blind to see before.

    Haha, I think I'm rambling. But all in all, this was really good and well written. I loved reading it. ^_^ Keep it up, you weirdo!
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by Vermalin | [ Reply to This ]
      Definently a lyrical piece in my mind. The refrain was perfect and your lines flowed quite nicely.
    The only bit I find contradicting is saying that 'I never said I don't love you... I never said that I hate you... I love, I love you' It seems to me that you begin with a feeling of indifference but fall in the end to the emotion of love. Or maybe unspoken love?
    But nonetheless, good work! I greatly enjoyed it!
    Peace ^_^v
    Ren
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by Renada | [ Reply to This ]
      hmmm....
    I liked it but yeah it seems like it is a song.
    Has a nice Love lorn feel to it.
    I like it but I didn't say I loved it
    xD

    Good stuff though dude, no doubt about it.

    Keep it up
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by Gunforhire | [ Reply to This ]
      Poetry or song? Maybe my mood's in the music lately, but this piece of art sounds like a song. A song that I must request to hear soon. Very soon. And at a time when I'm actually alert. Because most of the time, I talk to you when I'm all...blahhhh. Which is lame, because I don't want you think I'm all blah. You know?


    I love it. I love a lot of things, true. But, like...this just sounds pretty. And the concept? Oi. Oh, I do love concepts. But...like...you have both the concept and the words, y'know? I'd love to play music for this song. But, first, I shall have to better tune my abilities on the guitar! Right? Right.


    I don't know...the whole thing...just made me think...and question...and swoon. Made my heart patter the way good music/poetry should.


    I quite enjoyed it. Quite.
    | Posted on 2010-01-14 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]


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